Poor Imp

Poem about poetry Poem, oh Poem! This is my ode to thee Poem of poem Making meer ( mere - not meer )words into a symphony A symphony, a symphony ...

I find very little else, published or unpublished, which is compelling as that piece there. It is it the characters in particular. Not only are they well-described in narrative, but ...

This bit didn't seem to flow quite as well, as if you hadn't ordered the sequence of events as well to yourself before putting them out. The last seemed nearly ...

“There I told you there was new shop here he looked”, smugly at him He sighs… “Okay I get it Gary, but I swear when I walked passed here yesterday ...

Hey, CL - I read this and now I've finally gotten around to commenting. I enjoyed it; I liked the atmosphere and you created a believable world, and characters. Once ...

almost sounds like a litany. But yes, I know it's not (not the form); I suppose it's the repetition - which worked, by the way. I'm not much of a ...

No! Don't edit it out. Adam merely expressed his opinion - he doesn't like dream stories. That doesn't mean it was badly done. You could fix the punctuation there at ...

keeps up suspense pretty well. I think I would be more involved though, if you inserted a bit more description, outwardly, of the characters; even just a scrap here or ...

was dark, intriguing by description - and I assume vague by intent on character . (Well, that makes sense in third person limited.) The only thing that stuck out to ...

...I have only to say - watch the dialogue that it doesn't get awkward. Nothing sounded entirely out of place until... Percy nodded stiffly. “Aye aye, sir,” he chimed, his ...

That was...well, I don't say great only because it sounds too bright. But I very much enjoyed reading it. Inner debate and curt sentences kept my attention throughout; and not ...

Great tension in your short sentences and paragraphs. But you've got a repetitious problem with adverbs - ever so slowly and ever so gently . It popped out to me. ...

:lol: That was great - good, succinct humor. Besides the aforementioned comma problem, I saw nothing to complain of. Not that I would have complained about the comma under the ...